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Old 02-20-2008, 04:57 AM
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I agree with Hell's Angi.


This one was written during my downward spiral (hence the emo-ness of it all). I had just gone through a messy breakup, and found a new love: hard drugs. My job wasn't going so well either, due to hungover sick-calls.

Kind of cliche.

I've spent these years sculpting this ambitious being
Perfection felt close, but was far from achieved
Like a child unhanded in a museum of glass
Performing obnoxious, destructive acts
It took one for all to fall.


Glad I got out of that one!
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Old 02-20-2008, 01:44 PM
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I really like yours :D

Here's one of mine, or actually the only real poem I ever wrote. I usually write other stuff.
As you can easily tell the main topic in this is leaving, but it got a new meaning for me about 6 months or a year after it was written, when someone I knew died and i suddenly got this totally new impression of the poem.
it's pretty dilettante lol

Farewell

I'd rather be
leaving thee
easily

Without a word
to be heard
won't get hurt

But for all those
who once chose
to get close

One simple spell
I will tell
called 'farewell'
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Old 05-09-2008, 06:57 PM
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My first post on the forum, so lets hope that everything just works out fine.

I really like both your poems. It's hard to make poems that sound so close to what you feel.

I'm writing poetry for about 2 years now, but most of the poems are Dutch. I've writen some small poems in English. The poem is called "though wanderers eyes" and is divided in 4 smaller parts



Through Wanderers Eyes


The Night
The sun has left and the night has awaken
Guarding an abandoned child in the dark
A child with a message by his mother forsaken
And neither was there place for him at the ark
The darkest nights are yet to come
As the clouds cover the entire sky
The rain will fall which he can’t hide from
He wonders: will my soaked soul ever dry?
As he’s looking through the wanderers eye

The Moon
The pearl of the night, a silent witness
Of the world beyond imagination
Illuming those in the blackest dress
Trying to avoid permanent desolation
Coming together as the ritual starts
Bringing chaos and devastation
Aiming for those with weaker hearts
With a magic spell fulfilling their creation

The Sea
As my tears falling left a stain
Overwhelmed by an tidal wave
Flushed my emotions down the drain
Set course to their own grave
Diluted, my soul will no longer be
Rejected by emotions undetected
As I look in the water, as emptiness I see
Cause my soul is no longer reflected

The Winter
Stuck in the desert of ice and snow
No one directing me where to go
My vessels run cold and I cannot speak
But I still haven’t found for what I seek
Winter night, Show me your might
I won’t pass out in search of the light
I’ll fight cause I refuse to run and hide
I’m stuck in this endless, winter night

I don't know if you like it, but I;m happy with the result
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Old 05-20-2008, 01:17 PM
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That's cool that you can write in more than one language. I wish I could do that, as there's been times I wish I could sing a song in german or japanese or spanish. Anyway- I do a lot of song writing and this is one of my favorites.

Crescent Waltz

It should be me…
It should be me…

Drained of plasma I drift eternal…
Alone I spin among starry nights…
Discontent in my isolation,
In envy of the sphere you serve.

It should be me…
It should be me…
Why do you lead this waltz?
It should be me…
It should be me…

Drained of solace I turn in silence…

I’ve composed a waltz for you,
To share with you my agony…
For you to know the price I pay
To live beneath your gravity.
Through pain and distance, my bitter exchange,
I wander lonely while you brim with life…
I wander lonely while I am your slave.
I cannot look away.
I cannot...

It should be me…
It should be me…
Why do you lead,
Lead this waltz…?


If you'd like to hear the song it is recorded.
PM me or respond here and I can show it to you.
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Old 05-20-2008, 03:49 PM
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That's cool that you can write in more than one language.

Wel that isn't so strange for me. Dutch is my own language and English is one of the most important languages in the world so we're taught to learn English on school. Maybe it's nice to post a Dutch poem of me (with an English translation) It doesn't rhyme anymore when translated and there may be some mistakes but here it goes. I'm not certain about the translation of evenbeeld = spitting image


Wij Zijn

De zon werpt een schaduw over het leven.
En niets is, zonder iets te zijn,
voor het oog, de zonneschijn
een rede het een schaduw te geven

Door te zijn heeft alles al invloed.
De lucht die je adem vraagt,
schaduw, die jouw lichaam draagt,
wanneer straten opklaren in ochtendgloed

Zoals wij zijn, zijn wij veroordeeld
tot acceptatie van ons evenbeeld.

Sterfelijke wezens met onsterfelijk verlangen
Waarom willen we, wat we nooit kunnen bevangen,
En wat we kunnen, door iets anders vervangen?

Wij zijn gevleugelde harten, kijkend vol afgunst,
maar zeker ook met bewondering voor de kunst,
naar een vis die zwemt in het water



We are

The sun brings a shadow to this life.
And nothing is, without being something,
for the eye, the sunshine
a reason to give it a shadow

Just by being, everything will be influenced.
the air, which is asking your breath
the shadow, who's wearing your body
when streets clear up in morninglight

Like we are, we are convicted
to accept our own spitting image

mortal beings, with immortal desire.
why do we want what we can't overcome
and how can we change what we can in what we want

We are like winged hearts, looking jealously
but also admiration for the art
looking at a fish, swimming in the water
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Old 05-20-2008, 03:50 PM
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That's cool that you can write in more than one language. I wish I could do that, as there's been times I wish I could sing a song in german or japanese or spanish. Anyway- I do a lot of song writing and this is one of my favorites.

Crescent Waltz

It should be me…
It should be me…

Drained of plasma I drift eternal…
Alone I spin among starry nights…
Discontent in my isolation,
In envy of the sphere you serve.

It should be me…
It should be me…
Why do you lead this waltz?
It should be me…
It should be me…

Drained of solace I turn in silence…

I’ve composed a waltz for you,
To share with you my agony…
For you to know the price I pay
To live beneath your gravity.
Through pain and distance, my bitter exchange,
I wander lonely while you brim with life…
I wander lonely while I am your slave.
I cannot look away.
I cannot...

It should be me…
It should be me…
Why do you lead,
Lead this waltz…?


If you'd like to hear the song it is recorded.
PM me or respond here and I can show it to you.

Wow,those lyrics are amazing. I really like them,I kinda feel with the me in them I want to hear it!!!
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Old 05-21-2008, 12:21 AM
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Wel that isn't so strange for me. Dutch is my own language and English is one of the most important languages in the world so we're taught to learn English on school. Maybe it's nice to post a Dutch poem of me (with an English translation) It doesn't rhyme anymore when translated and there may be some mistakes but here it goes. I'm not certain about the translation of evenbeeld = spitting image
I don't know if there were mistakes, but your poem is beautiful even in english.

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Wow,those lyrics are amazing. I really like them,I kinda feel with the me in them I want to hear it!!!
I'm uploading it to a Yousendit.com site. I'll PM you the link. It's the first track on our full length CD : )

If anyone is interested in hearing/reading more, I can arrange that.
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Old 08-21-2008, 09:52 AM
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I love all of the works that you have posted, everyone. I suppose I will post some of my poetry. I write when I feel something inside me, a restless something, that requires expression.

First, I am not crazy about this one.

no one ever talks to me
i fear this is the end
and all it would have taken
is for me to have a friend

as the lights begin to dim
for perhaps the last day
the curtain closes on a man
who somehow lost his way

look elsewhere for encouragement
as smile it leaves my face
and do me the kind favor
memories of me erase

i did not make a difference
although its true i tried
i loved and gave all that i had
and yes, its true, i lied

i tried to be the greatest friend
a person could e'er be
but in the end it was too true
no one ever talks to me

so whispers choke out one last phrase
to end this somber song
may all you do be ever blessed
and may your life be long

Second, I like this one better.

we rage against the dark inside
fierce battle with the light
and wish we had a better way
that we knew how to fight
torn by the winds of this mad world
hopes light dims from our eyes
and drearily we take each step
and whisper forlorn sighs
and still one day we know there'll come
this old beginnings end
and finally we'll have the chance
to start once more, my friend
so dance with me among the stars
in million years or three
but in the meantime pardon tears
shed at root of mankinds tree
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Old 10-14-2008, 11:38 AM
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so here we go new poem...

the season of your hunt has begun again
it's getting tight inside of me
and i cant flee
and i am alone
you creep me out
you suffocate happiness
you want to conquer the sun
you want it to be dark
and wasnt your name...
darkness?
you get me back,settled in
memories
i need to cry and shout
come back
you destroyed me
because i fell...down
and took the best out of me
and just left the worst inside of me
come back, i beg you
and show me how to function
in this ugly world...
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Old 10-14-2008, 11:40 AM
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alex this poem is so beautiful..and sad but i loove it
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This shiuld be here

Why did i cut myself
It was so worthless
Why did i cut so deep
I am so happy
Happy
Worthless
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Old 10-26-2008, 07:57 AM
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^i know what you're talking about, Jake!
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Old 11-11-2008, 12:50 PM
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i've been writing these scars only for you
nothing ever remains now
but the pain
carving messages, to you
you cannot pick up
the only real thing you left
is a broken heart
that weeps,cries and shouts
for you to fix it
so it can function normally again
because nothing's normal anymore
my mind cannot rest
until it doesn't know the truth
the truth you left behind with a question mark
so lonely
waiting for the day i can close you in my arms
and forget all of these scars
i've been bleeding only for you
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Old 11-16-2008, 05:11 PM
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Now I stand here - with open eyes - full of inspiration - at the place of love - the place of power.
I let the wind and the colours rain down on me and they begat one with me.
I realize how something flows through my body and this gives me a feeling of an unspeaktable tender embrace.
The colours change their tones and begin to sound - and finally they end in an rainbow.
The wind has a soft breeze and strives my body.
The power of this place grasps me.
But I still do let go of it and go back to live further as I did.
But deep inside - this memory stays forever - of this monent - of this divine embrace.
Let it flow!!!


I wrote that after i was inpired by a place in the nature!
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Solace


You are a world all your own
And a god that no one has ever known
But I am just a stone, and into the ocean I was thrown

There is nothing left to learn from some secret tome
No wisdom left to be gained from a badly written poem
I am just a traveler, trying to find my way back home




Pure


Once upon a time wasn’t so long ago
And everyone would know

Our greatest secret is that we can never show
Just how the real story will go

How could everyone know we are just animals
Clever beasts seek to know what way this life will go

But our silent shadows could never show
A life pure as the falling snow

Our time was spent waiting
Finding what way we should go

All this time how could no one know
That life is little more than a great flow

Time wasted trying to show
Just how many ways we should not go

But our living shadows will never know
A life pure as the falling snow
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