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Old 05-26-2008, 12:40 PM
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yeah i agree...it's really really good...i love it, alex....u know I'm too stupid to write such a great stuff liek that
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Old 05-26-2008, 08:27 PM
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xrayqueen: i always enjoy reading your poetry. i think you are a really good poet
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Old 05-27-2008, 12:48 AM
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Hi all, its good to find a TBM board out there Heres one of mine:
"May all thoughts of you pass, for you were my day, my night. I basked in your glow, bathed in your tears and swam through your sorrows. Twas then you were my in arms to hold, and now I shall forever wait in the black void where my heart once stood. It is empty because of you."
Its about my exfiancee...
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Old 05-30-2008, 10:41 PM
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I'll post one of mine! It's a sad one though. I actually have this posted on fictionpress.com, but I forgot my password and can't get in. It's called Not Meant for You.

We met by accident, a simple mistake,
A chance of luck, or a twist of fate.
But at once we knew it was more than that.
A fork in the road became one solid path.
We hit it off good, getting along so great,
The same things we'd love, and the same things we'd hate.
We were meant to be, it all seemed so right.
But there was a catch so short of our sight.
And just like our meeting, the nightmare came.
A simple stray bullet and a crimson stain.
It went straight to your heart, so warm and big.
Like the strike of a match, or the snap of a twig.
And there in my arms...there you did lay.
Not shedding a tear as your life slipped away.
I cried for help, told you to hang on.
But you shook your head and said, "Soon I'll be gone."
And with your last breath you said, "I'll always be yours."
Then you left me and went to heaven's doors.
You had so much to live for and so much to see.
A long, bright future for you and for me.
And in the blink of an eye it was taken away.
Because someone's bullet went the wrong way.
So you had to pay, and I had to lose,
Over a simple stray bullet, not meant for you.


I know it's sad. It's the only one of my poems that made my mom cry. (That's a hard task to do...)
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Old 05-31-2008, 12:21 AM
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That was beautiful, not normally am I impressed with ones poetry (its all generic) but this strikes me as thought out and original Wonderful!
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Old 05-31-2008, 02:40 PM
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Hey, thanks!!

Everyone here is so talented. I always wanted to run my own publishing company. I would so publish you all...
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Valentine,your poem is touching as hell.It's beautiful and kind of relating.
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Thank you. It's good to have people that actually read it.
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Old 06-01-2008, 12:19 AM
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As I Watch Her Slip Away...

As I watch her slip away, I think about our times of harmony. She once gazed upon me in beauty, but in me she stares in a dying eye. A farwell is always another needle in my side. A goodbye is another lifetime spent. The clock stops, the record skips... and skips shes gone. She is no longer in my arms to hold. Faded away like a memory, a song I can no longer sing. A farwell and goodbye as the needle stings and the lifetime passes. I loved you as you slipped away.
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Old 06-18-2008, 02:42 AM
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so...i wrote a poem the other day i hope you'll like it!

There's an angel
with broken wings
lying on the cold,dirty floor
she's just lying there,shivering
and no one comes to save her
and implant a new heart into her breast
her heart is diseased and old
and dying ever day a little more
Since he went away and was out of reach
she's alobe
she lived in a fiction
and just got in touch with reality
like a cold wind blowing you away
and that's what brings her to tears
Say Amen and quit
fly with your wings to heaven
it's the place you'll see him again
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so...i wrote a poem the other day i hope you'll like it!

There's an angel
with broken wings
lying on the cold,dirty floor
she's just lying there,shivering
and no one comes to save her
and implant a new heart into her breast
her heart is diseased and old
and dying ever day a little more
Since he went away and was out of reach
she's alobe
she lived in a fiction
and just got in touch with reality
like a cold wind blowing you away
and that's what brings her to tears
Say Amen and quit
fly with your wings to heaven
it's the place you'll see him again
aww that poem is really, really beautiful...it's sad but i really like it
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Old 06-18-2008, 01:12 PM
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thank you =) eeeh,my poems always tend to be sad :/ i love writing poems,they free me
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thank you =) eeeh,my poems always tend to be sad :/ i love writing poems,they free me
i know...same with my stories...
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Old 06-18-2008, 06:18 PM
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MissFalcore, You did a great job. I really like the poem. It really stand out for itself.
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My misstake, I mend xrayqueen
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